I believe it was yesterday we wrote our November poems. This month we’ll try a Japanese poetry form; dodoitsu. It is non-rhyming, with a humorous twist. (información en español abajo) Dodoitsu has four lines: 7 syllables, 7 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables. Please write about harvest or nature. You have until December 11 noon CST to place your poem in the comments below or on your website with a link here. Rated G please. Please use the challenge tag: ffpoemapop. Poems and translations into Spanish or English will be published December 13.
Era ayer que escribimos los poemas de noviembre, parece. Este mes intentaremos otra forma poética japonesa; dodoitsu. No rima, y tiene un desenlace cómico. Dodoitsu tiene cuatro líneas: 7 sílabas, 7 sílabas, 7 sílabas, 5 sílabas. Escribe sobre la cosecha o la naturaleza. Tienes hasta el 11 diciembre para colocar tu poema en los comentarios abajo o en tu sitio web con un enlace. Para todas las audiencias. Favor de usar la etiqueta: ffpoemapop. El 13 diciembre publicaré los poemas y sus traducciones.
Example poem:
Black walnut seeds in the ground
Crabapple branches picked clean
Porch pumpkins, diving for seeds
Well rounded squirrels.
–Rebecca Cuningham, 5 December, 2022
Poema de ejemplo:
Nueces negras sí
Manzanitas — sí
Pepas de calabaza….
Ardillotas, sí.
–Rebecca Cuningham, 5 diciembre, 2022
Look forward to your poems! Deadline: Sunday, December 11, noon CST. ¡Olé! –Rebecca
¡Espero con ganas leer tus poemas! La fecha de entrega: el domingo 11 diciembre, al mediodía (Chicago). ¡Olé! –Rebecca

Let’s do this!! I will share it with some good poets.
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Thanks very much, Devang.
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I’ve already shared this one with many poets I know.
One of the poet, with whom I’ve Collaborated in the last blog, responded positively.
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Great, look forward to their contribution.
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On theme this time:
The last apple of autumn
clings to the now leafless branch
denying winter’s approach
yet the pie crust waits.
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Thanks, Lou. The pie waits for no Gala.
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Ah yes! Autumn fruits yield comforting winter puddings. Very evocative!
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Oooh, that’s learn me to jump the gun. I was polishing a poem about Christmas baking, which won’t fool anyone into thinking it’s about harvest or nature. Back to the quill and parchment I go!
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Apologies for the incomplete message Sunday. I’d like to see the baking poem. 🙂
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Maybe. I’ve now left it, neglected, with a cleaning cloth beside it, while I think about the Proper Task!
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Joni Mitchell’s refrain plays
River to skate away on
Like a lion’s roar, ice cracks
Eagle gets a fish!
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Wonderful, Susan. Very Minnesota winter bright.
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That’s a proper fairytale winter scene you’ve conjured there.
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A Minnesota specialty, well written by a poet who’s made that state her home.
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Ah, that sounds so wonderful.
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Love the well rounded squirrels diving for seeds!
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Thanks, Carolyn. As seen on our doorstep.
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Such dull December’s winter seems to be so cold,
Yet somehow it is filled with such splendor warmth from God,
Shadows of furry animals kept themselves hidden from sight,
Icy cold breath makes it more delicate.
– Poetry Goddess – 8 Dec 2022
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Thanks for participating in the poetry challenge. Your poem is four lines like a dodoitsu. That’s a great start. The lines are longer than the 7, 7, 7, and 5 lines prescribed for the form. Here is an example of your theme in that form:
Such dull December’s Winter (7)
Yet filled with God’s splendor warmth (7)
Furry animals hidden (7)
Delicate cold breath (5)
Your words edited to fit the syllables 🙂
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Thank you for correcting. If it is okay, please proceed.
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testing 123 (password challenges)
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Sorry WP is challenging your identity. I’ll vouch for you.
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Well, I’m not doing well with this dodoitsu. As you know, my first attempt was off the mark. Then I wrote another, and discovered – aaagh! – that it was one line too long. Back to the drawing board. Well, here we are again. I feel that none of my efforts with Japanese forms hit the mark of chiming with the Japanese poetic mood, which always seems quite wistful to me. Yes, I’ve obeyed the rules – but not really got a poem the Japanese would recognise as being in their own tradition. I’ve felt this with every poem I’ve attempted following their traditional forms. Still, gotta give everything a ty!
Harvest’s over, fields are bare.
At the margins, harvest’s here –
Berries black and white and red.
Feasts for birds. Yipee!
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Dear Margaret, fortunately we are having fun with poetry rather than writing the definitive dodoitsu. Yours made me smile and laugh for a full five minutes with the last line. 🙂
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You’re absolutely right of course. And if I made you laugh- job done!
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Precisely, thumbs up (or feathers). 😆
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Hi Rebecca, here’s mine.
http://lifeafter50forwomen.com/2022/12/08/december-poetry-challenge-dodoitsu/
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Thanks, Sadje. I look forward to reading it. 🙂
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Thanks my friend
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Um, this one is straight from the heart:
Very late buying presents
I rush to the internet
others plan a postal strike
I fear Yule trouble
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Thanks, Kim. Tis that nervous season of sending gifts that may arrive on time. If you are open to a humorous twist, the last line could be about reindeer.
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Oops I forgot about the funny twist!
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Haha! I’ve written to Those Whom it May Concern telling them that I’m posting nothing at all till after Christmas. A DPD driver s told a friend yesterday that there were 200,000 parcels awaiting delivery in his main regional office! Unlike you, I haven’t even started buying yet. Why change the habits of a lifetime?
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Second version:
Very late buying presents
I rush to the internet
others plan a postal strike
Bring on the reindeer!
😀
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Excellent, Kim! Who knew we’d need them so much. 🙂
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😀
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Here’s mine Rebecca 🙂 Thanks. I enjoyed writing this one
https://mindfills.wordpress.com/2022/12/09/rainclouds-dodoitsu/
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Thanks for your water dodoitsu!
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Thanks for the lovely challenge Rebecca 😀
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Hello Rebecca!
Thank you for another as always magnifica poem challenge.
Here is my link:
Gracias!
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Thanks, Suzette. Look forward to reading your verse!
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Hi Rebecca
Here’s my attempt 🙃
https://destinysdesignz.wordpress.com/2022/12/10/mimicry/
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Thank you for your wintry dodoitsu with the surprise ending!
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Thank you…was a tricky one.
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You managed a great surprise ending. 🙂
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🙃🤗Thank you… Much appreciated…
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Thanks for hosting this ❤ I love reading your translations =D Here's mine 🙂 https://cognacproject.wordpress.com/2022/12/10/playing-in-the-rain/
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Thanks for your poem! Translation day tomorrow 🙂
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Thank you for hosting this.
Here’s my attempt🙂
https://myluvmymusic.wordpress.com/2022/12/11/sky-story-poetry-blog-23/
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Thanks for writing a dodoitsu for the challenge, Vidah. Welcome!
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My pleasure!!
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Hi respected friend.
A fellow blogger friend wrote for this challenge as well
Please check
https://myluvmymusic.wordpress.com/2022/12/11/sky-story-poetry-blog-23/
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Thanks, Devang. I was caught up in saying good night to our child. I am back online and have read Vidah’s lovely poem. Thanks so much for referring your poet friends our way!
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